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Old 05-02-2010, 09:53 AM
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my first fanfic. only 2 people have read it on Avatar forums so i will try my luck here.

Chapter 1

It had nearly been six years. Nearly six years of travelling through space. Nearly six years of being away from earth. Nearly six years of talking to no one. Nearly six years of not having to put up with all the bull**** from everyone and everything around him. But it seemed like only yesterday that he left. Waking up from cryo brought back that feeling of being on earth. But that dull, boring, miserable planet that people called home was far, far away and a new world was waiting for him. He didn’t know what to think of this new planet, although from stories he had heard this world was so familiar, yet so alien. A paradise that leaves you astonished, but at the same time is a nightmare. Floating in his chamber, he thought about this new career and this new world along with the changes it would bring to his life. Was joining the Avatar program the right decision?

One of the crew members came to let him out of his chamber so he could get ready to be shuttled to Pandora. He got changed and got all his gear. Already he felt uncomfortable as there were many people surrounding him. Who were these people? Scientists? Soldiers? Who cares, to him they were all *******s who he didn’t want to talk to. Paying no attention to people around him, he made his way to the Valkyrie shuttle. Upon entering the shuttle he got the feeling that he was being stared at. One person after another seemed to look at him for a few seconds and then look away. This gave him the ****s. He sat down and strapped in. To his right sat a young man of similar age who looked like a marine. He was dressed in military gear and seemed nervous. Shaking his legs rapidly, the young man closed his eyes, tilted his head down and mumbled as if he was praying. After everyone was seated the shuttle detached from the ISV and roared its engines as it descended towards Pandora. The g forces could be felt and it was uncomfortable as the seats were positioned sideways.

The shuttle then entered the atmosphere and made its way towards Hell’s Gate. On the way, the lush Pandoran forest could be seen stretching for kilometres in every direction. There were rivers which connected to ponds and lakes with animals drinking from them while flying beasts glided above the forest canopy in groups. In the distance, large rocks floating in the air could be seen. Only if the passengers could get a glimpse of this incredible view. This is why Valkyrie shuttle pilots are considered to be incredibly lucky. As the shuttle approached Hell’s Gate it was accompanied by four Scorpion gunships. The sight of a Valkyrie shuttle landing can only be described as awesome. As its thrusters rotate into the vertical position, they let out tons of thrust and bring the enormous spacecraft steadily to the ground. Inside the shuttle, people were putting on their exopacks and backpacks, getting ready to exit the shuttle. The rear doors opened, letting in the dense Pandoran air and the sunlight that these people hadn’t seen for nearly six years. It blinded them, then slowly eased off to reveal a huge military base surrounded by mountains all under a blue sky.

The passengers exited the shuttle and were ordered to make their way to the main complex where they would be given a speech. Seeing how big the place was made him realize that there would be lots of people, ****en great. The last thing he wanted was to see more people. He walked into a large room and joined many others, ready to be given a speech. Once everyone had entered the room, a man walked to the front where he could be seen and heard by everyone. The room went silent and the speech started.

“Ladies and gentlemen, welcome to Pandora. My name is Colonel Damien Hilton. I am in charge of security. Now, I’m sure all of you have heard many stories about this place. That it’s a “paradise”. And that it’s the most beautiful place you will ever see. Well let me tell you this. Whatever it is that you heard, you may just as well forget about it. This place, ladies and gentlemen, is NO paradise. It is the most dangerous place known to man. I guarantee you, that if you do not watch yourself at all hours of the day, all days of the week, all weeks of the year, then you WILL die. What we fight against on a daily basis is what you will eventually call your worst nightmare. I am certain that by the time the next shuttle arrives, some of you will be dead. If you do not want that to happen, then I suggest you listen, and listen well, to what I am about to say. We have rules here. They apply at all times. If you want to survive on Pandora, then you must obey ALL the rules ALL the time”

By now he was getting extremely bored. While everyone was paying attention to every word being said with their eyes glued to the colonel, he was looking at the floor with his head resting on one of his hands wondering when this guy was going to shut up. What did you expect? A scientist wants to hear about science, not some army tough guy giving orders. The colonel went on to explain the rules. Our young scientist started to fall asleep, bobbing his head up and down like it was a buoy on a fishing line. Once the speech had finished everyone got up to go to their dormitories. He decided to wait until everyone had left so then he could go last. He made his way to the dorms. It was a large room with many bunk beds and closets. He found his allocated bed and started to unpack his stuff. As he was unpacking his stuff, he was tapped on the shoulder. He turned around to see a girl who greeted him with a smile.

“Hey!” she said, but he stayed silent.
“You don’t remember me? Haha, well it has been more than 6 years hasn’t it”
He still stayed silent. He showed no emotions on his face which made the girl feel uncomfortable.
“It’s me. Yuki..... Yuki Kubota? We went to university together?”
He continued to be silent while trying to remember who this girl was. It took him a while but he remembered, he was in her group for a few assignments. Letting out a breath which was his poor effort at a laugh, he nodded his head slightly to signify he had remembered.
“Yeah, you remember! Wow, what a coincidence. I never thought we would meet here, on Pandora”
Still, he continued with the silence. The awkwardness was building up and it made Yuki uncomfortable.
“Well….. I’ll go now. I need to finish unpacking my stuff. I guess I’ll talk to you later”
Without waving his hand, or even putting it up, to show a bye he continued to unpack his stuff. What an *******.

Before he realized it, the sun had risen past its highest point and into the afternoon. He had finished unpacking his stuff and had a walk around of the complex. He could have gone and talked to people but being the antisocial prick that he was, he chose not to. Instead, he decided to make his way down to the lab. Navigating his way through the many corridors, he finally reached the lab. It was pretty big. There were many desks with computers and littered with papers. A few of them had pictures of loved ones and places back on earth. Some chairs had lab coats hung on them. Scientists were everywhere. They could be seen talking to each other, working with data on the computers, examining specimens through microscopes and all the other usual science stuff. Our young scientist felt very lost. But this was the place that he would be spending most, if not all, of his time. Suddenly, a voice from behind him called to him.

“Hello. Can I help you with something?” said a gentle female voice. He turned around to face the woman. She was very beautiful for a woman in her late 30's. She had the face which made people assume straight away that she was a very kind person. With her hair untied, wearing a lab coat over her very casual clothes and a pair of blue converses, she stood in front of him waiting for a reply. Not knowing what to say, he looked around the room and then finally to the floor followed by a scratch to his forehead.
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“Hey, I recognize you.” Said the woman.
“You’re one of the new Avatar drivers aren’t you? Yeah, I think I saw your photo in one of the profiles I was going through earlier today. No?” Still no reply from him.
“A bit shy eh? Hehe, it’s ok. But I’m sure I saw your photo somewhere in that list. Let’s have a look shall we?” She walked to her desk and picked up the list of new Avatar drivers. She flicked through the pages of profiles and came to a stop.

“Takumi Ling? Yes? Is it ok if I call you Tak? The shorter the name, the easier I remember it, hahaha.”
So that’s what his name was! Takumi Ling. Tak nodded his head gently and kept his head down.
“Well it’s nice to meet you Tak. My name is Dr. Gillian Eileen, but you can just call me Gillian. I‘m one of the head scientists around here. Well, Dr. Augustine is THE head scientist but I just help her out so I’m sort of her assistant. And you will be part of my research group. I would like you to meet the rest of the team but they seem busy at the moment so how about I introduce you to them at dinner?”
Again, Tak nodded his head in agreement.

“Good…… So, would you like to go see your Avatar?”
Suddenly, Tak’s eyes widened. His pupils enlarged and his heart rate rose.
“yes” he said in a calm voice

Dr. Eileen looked a bit surprised as he had finally said something. “Ok, let’s go check it out.” She replied.
They walked over to the amnio tanks which lit up this particular section of the lab with a blue glow. As Tak walked by, he couldn’t help but to stare in amazement at the Avatars. They were so big, so blue, so alien, yet so human like. The two stopped at the last tank.

“This is yours” said Dr. Eileen. Tak could not believe what he was seeing. His very own Avatar. It was him, but it wasn’t. His Avatar was slightly curled up into a ball, just like how a foetus is when inside its mother’s womb. Its head was tucked in, its shoulders slightly in towards its chest, its arms and legs folded and its tail freely floating in the fluid. Dr. Eileen started to say something but Tak was paying no attention to her at all as he stared at his Avatar.

“….. I think I’ll leave you two now.” She said, and walked back to the busy part of the lab. Tak got a chair and sat down in front of his other half. His big, blue alien half. For the rest of the night he sat there, staring at his Avatar. When it was time to return to the dorms, he felt sad even though he would get to see his Avatar and even drive in the coming days. He made his way to the dorms for a shower and went to sleep. Laying in his bed, he thought about the things he would be doing in his Avatar in the days to come.
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Chapter 2

It was morning and the sun cast an orange glow into the dorms. Tetrapterons could be heard outside as they called to each other. While everyone was starting to wake up, Tak was still asleep. He had gone to bed pretty late as he couldn’t get to sleep due to the excitement from seeing his Avatar for the first time. He then felt someone tapping him on the shoulder. He ignored it but it continued. Annoyed, he turned his head and opened his eyes.

“I think you should wake up”

It was Yuki smiling at him. She was already dressed and ready to head off to the dining hall for breakfast. Extremely hungry, since he didn’t eat dinner the previous night, he slowly got out of bed and headed to the shower. With the water pouring over his face, he still couldn’t stop thinking about his Avatar. After a nice long shower, he got out, dried himself and got changed. He then made his way to the dining hall.

The dining hall was a large room filled with long tables and seats. To one side there was a bench where the food was served. Behind it was the kitchen. People were already sitting down, eating and talking to each other. Tak made his way to the bench and got himself an adequate sized bowl of cereal along with a more than enough serving of eggs and some kind of Pandora animal meat that was cooked. He then walked over to the tables to try and find a seat. It looked like all the seats were taken, but he managed to find one on the end of a table. He was sitting all by himself. Wasting no time he ate his food. Behind him were a group of marines who took note of the fact that Tak was a scientist and that he was sitting by himself. As Tak was eating his breakfast, he felt something hit his head. He ignored it. But it happened again, he ignored it. Then it happened again, and again, and again. He turned around to see the marines with their heads down and doing a bad job of holding in their laughs. He turned back and continued with his food. The marines then got up with their food trays and dumped their rubbish onto his tray. Extremely pissed off, he removed his bowl of cereal and plate of eggs and Pandoran meat from his tray and threw it at one of the marines. The whole dining hall went silent. Everyone was staring at Tak. The marine slowly turned around and approached him. He got right in his face and the two just stared at each other. Dr. Eileen ran to the two of them

“Hey hey hey! Let’s just calm down ok! Just take it easy”

She separated them by standing in between them and slowly pushed Tak away. The marine approached a little more and opened his mouth.

“****en bitch, you’re lucky your boss stepped in for you. Cos I would’ve ****ed you up so bad, that you wouldn’t even recognize yourself the next time you looked in the mirror. ****en scientist piece of ****. Let’s get the **** out of here”

The marines left and the people in the dining hall returned to their conversations. Dr. Eileen sat down next to Tak.

“Ignore those *******s” she said.

Tak never forgot the face of his enemies. The face of the marine and what he said was all that was going through his mind. Filled with anger, he breathed slowly to try and calm himself down. After a while, people started to clean up and leave for their daily activites. As Tak was throwing away his rubbish, a woman stood next to him and spoke.

“Impressive. I’ve never seen a scientist do that. He’s got balls Gillian. And he’s good looking. He’s a keeper”

Dr. Eileen laughed. She then introduced Tak to the lady. “Tak, this is Dr. Grace Augustine, she’s head of the Avatar program.”
Tak shook her hand and softly replied “Nice to meet you Dr. Augustine”
“Gosh, the things I would do to have someone like you on my team. You really set an example for the rest of us geeks today. Keep it up and maybe the rest will follow” said Dr. Augustine.
“…… I’ll do my best” replied Tak.
“Oh god, I think I’m in love” said Dr. Augustine
Dr. Eileen laughed. She then walked with Tak towards the lab. Still angry over what happened back in the dining hall, Tak asked a question.
“So who the **** were those douchebags?”
“Oh, those guys. Just some typical marine *******s. The one who got in your face is Sergeant Rolf Terry. He always gives us scientists a hard time. You learn to ignore it after a while. But don’t worry about it. Let’s just focus on getting you into your Avatar ok? Meet me back at the lab in 30 minutes.”

Tak went back to the dorms to brush his teeth. He couldn’t wait. Finally, he was going to get to use his Avatar. After brushing his teeth he walked to the lab and got ready for what he had been waiting for over 6 years. He spotted Dr. Eileen and walked over to her.
“Well you’re early aren’t you! Eager to try out your Avatar I see. Oh, before we get started I want to introduce you to the rest of my team. I was going to do so last night but you weren’t at dinner. Anyway, this is Dr. Joel Dale, this is Dr. Lynda Isaac and this is Dr. Elliot Brent”
One by one, they greeted Tak and shook his hand.
“They’re all Avatar drivers as well so you’ll be working with them out in the open. Well, let’s get you into your Avatar shall we?”

Dr. Eileen led Tak to a link and started to set it up with the corresponding touch screen monitor. Tak took off his shoes, opened the link and lied down. He lowered the metal frame over his chest and awaited further instructions.
“Ok, you’re all set. Just close your eyes and try to relax.” Said Dr. Eileen. She then proceeded to close the lid of the link and walked over to the link supervisor. She stared at the screen as it showed the progress of the connection being made. It was slow but it was connecting.
“A bit slow, but so far looks good” she said.
It had now reached 98% but then suddenly it unexpectedly stopped. At first she remained calm but after a while she started to worry.
“Oh no what’s wrong. No no no no no. Oh no, this doesn’t look good”
Just as she was about go to Tak’s link and check the connection continued onto 100% and was finally established.

“****, I was getting worried there” said Dr. Eileen with relief.
She walked over to the window where she could see Tak’s Avatar lying on a bed. Two scientists were assisting his Avatar. They called his name, but no response. They clicked their fingers next to his ear but no response. One scientist turned to Dr. Eileen and shook her head to which Dr. Eileen sighed and face palmed. This was not looking good. But then the other scientist waved his hand to signify something was happening.

“Hey, I think he’s waking up” said the scientist.
The scientists continued to call Tak’s name. Eventually he managed to very slowly open his eyes. His breathing was faint and slow, but could just be heard.
“You good? You feel ok?” asked one of the scientists.

Tak then opened his eyes more and looked around the room. He lay on his back for a minute until he decided to sit up. The scientists and Dr. Eileen were surprised. Tak’s Avatar was different. Unlike the Na’vi and even most Avatars, his Avatar had wider shoulders. There was also a bit more muscle mass but it was not toned. His eyes were slightly coloured differently with the usual bright gold iris being a bit brighter. His DNA had managed to splice well with the Na’vi DNA as the Na’vi facial features were dominant over the human ones. However it was still recognizable as Tak. He continued to move the rest of his body, moving his fingers and toes, wrists, elbows, ankles and neck. After feeling confident he decided to put his feet on the floor. Impressed with his fast progress, the scientists gave him the green light to stand up. He did, but very slowly. Again, the scientists and Dr. Eileen were stunned. He was a bit taller than the average Avatar and Na’vi. Standing at a little over 10ft tall, this was one sexy Avatar. Tak continued to work on moving around in his Avatar until noon.

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When it was time for lunch, the team made their way to the dining hall to grab some sandwiches. Like before, everyone went ahead while Tak stayed lying in his link with the lid open, still processing the information from what he had just experienced. His first breath, his first sight, his first touch, his first step with his Avatar. It took a while for him to make his way to the dining hall. Again he was alone. He took a seat at an empty table and took a few bites from his ham sandwich. But his peace and quiet was disrupted by someone else joining him.

God dammit, ****en ham and cheese” said the man to himself. He looked familiar. That’s when it hit Tak. It was the same guy who was ****ting his pants back in the Valkyrie shuttle. The man then looked at Tak and continued to speak.

“You know what I’m saying? I mean, if I wanted to eat this boring tasteless **** then I would have stayed on Earth! I mean come on! I want some Pandoran meat, or fruit or something alien. Not this crap!”
Tak looked at him with a slight WTF type expression on his face. The man stuck his hand out and introduced himself.

“Oh, Corporal Alan Major. Nice to meet you”
Another marine. Tak thought negative thoughts. But since it was such a change from the last marine he had met, he decided to give this one a go. He shook his hand and introduced himself as well.
“Takumi Ling…. Ehh……. Avatar driver”

“Wow, you’re an Avatar driver? Nice, I wish I had one. I’ve heard so many stories about this place and seems like the only way to fully experience it is with one of those blue puppets. You’re really lucky. Well, it’s not so bad as I’ve been assigned the duty of accompanying a group of Avatars. I’m replacing a guy who got his *** torn to pieces by this thing called a Thanator…….. ”

There was a moment of silence. Tak didn’t know what to say. Alan then continued.
“But yeah, anyway…. This place is meant to be heaps of fun. Flying dinasour brids, six legged dogs, man eating plants, oh and those native blue people. Damn, I really want to meet one. I’ve never met an alien before. Although one time in highschool me and a friend did see something in the sky. It was weird you know? Like, it was this light but funny coloured….. and it was going crazy, but yeah….”
Tak didn’t know what to think of this guy. Was he on drugs or was he just retarded? Well, for a marine he was pretty friendly. He decided to talk a bit as well.

“eehhh… yeah, well just becareful. This planet is pretty hostile……well I should go now”
“Alright, nice meeting you. See you around later yeah?”
“yeah, see ya”

Tak walked back to the lab with his sandwich. On the way he thought about the conversation he just had. Did he just become friends with a marine? Maybe. Before entering the lab he shoved the rest of his sandwich into his mouth and walked back to his link. He sat on it and waited for Dr. Eileen and the team to return. After waiting for over twenty minutes, the gang finally arrived. Not surprised to see Tak back so early, Dr. Eileen setup the link again and Tak got in.

“You did good for your first time, I think you’re ready to go outside and have some fun” she said. Tak smiled a bit. The connection was re established and Tak woke up in his Avatar. Again, he slowly put his feet onto the floor and slowly walked. New clothes were waiting for him next to the door. He entered the Avatar change room and got dressed in the standard Avatar clothing. He then made his way outside. It was a great feeling. The warmth of Alpha Centuri A’s sunlight on his skin accompanied the deadly yet clean crisp Pandoran air filling his lungs. He walked around the Avatar training grounds and saw the other Avatars doing all sorts of activites. This made him want to run, but he started with jogging. However within a minute or so he was running and jumping, making his way through the obstacle courses. Tak now had a new body.
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Chapter 3

It had been four days since Tak first got into his Avatar. Every day he spent a good two to three hours exercising in his Avatar. He completed the obstacle courses multiple times, requiring him to run, jump and climb up ropes. He would do push ups and sit ups. It was getting too easy. He had also begun work on what Dr. Eileen had been doing for the past twelve years. She had been studying the Pandoran plants and most recently the Pennanemonoid Ciliare, or commonly known as the Anemonid, which is able to detoxify the soil by absorbing metals through its roots and use it for nutrients in order to grow. Her studies had shown a lot about how the plant works and its possibilities that it could possibly be grown on Earth in order to clean the heavily polluted soil. Although the RDA had no interest in the Avatar program, they weren’t going to shut it down for a while as the Pandoran plants were possibilities to restoring Earth which meant it was an opportunity to make enormous amounts of money, the RDA’s only objective.

Tak was different from most kids. His lack of socialising meant more time reading books and magazines. As a child and teen he would spend half his free time reading articles about the flora and fauna of earth, most of which were from pre 22nd century. He then started to show interest in Pandoran flora and fauna and decided that he would become a scientist who would work towards restoring what was left of the natural world. The other half was spent well on playing his electric guitar and learning martial arts. A hardcore biology nerd put together with a pro guitarist and a black belt in Judo and Karate? Now that’s a potent mix!

After completing his afternoon training session and waking up from the link, Dr. Eileen had a good look at him.
“You’re ready” she said. Not knowing what she was talking about, Tak stared back at her in confusion.
“Meet me here at 10am tomorrow” she said, then walked off to her desk. Tak exited from the link and thought about what she had just said. Feeling hungry from all the work he had been doing all day, he decided to head off to the dining hall for some fruit. He exited the lab and made his way through the network of corridors. As he was walking down a long corridor, two marines marched towards him and pushed him into the wall. One went for a punch but Tak dodged it, and another.

After creating some space between him and the marines, he took a good look at their faces. He recognized them from his encounter with Sergeant Rolf Terry. The two meatheads wasted no time and charged at Tak. They had made a bad mistake. One managed to get a hold of Tak while the other attempted to throw in as many punches but he was kicked in the face and fell to the ground. Still being held, Tak used his heel and delivered a solid kick the the other marine’s shin. He then managed to break the hold and Judo threw his enemy onto the ground with all his power. Landing flat on his back, the marine gasped for air. Tak then stomped on his face six times and knocked him out. By now the one who was kicked in the face had got back up. He threw another punch, only to have it caught and used against him in a perfectly executed ippon seoinage. Now both of them were on their backs. Extremely pumped with 100% pure anger, Tak showed no mercy to the unlucky conscious marine and threw heavy punches into his face, causing it to bruise and swell and also breaking his nose. Seeing the other half conscious marine trying to get up, he got a small run up and kicked him in the face like a goalie taking a goal kick. The two marines laid on the ground in a pool of blood. Tak continued to the dining hall.

No one was in the dining hall but Tak. He sat down and ate a banana, then heard footsteps. Thinking it was someone looking for more trouble he turned round and looked. However it was Yuki. Seeing 6 foot 1inch tall, muscular, bad *** looking Tak sit alone at a table and eat a banana was pretty funny and brought a smile to her face. She sat down in front of him.

“How are you?” she asked, but Tak didn’t reply. He was looking down at the table with half open eyes as if he was tired.
“What’s wrong?” asked Yuki. “Are you ok?” after a while Tak finally answered.
“I ****en hate people” he said in a calm voice. Knowing typical Tak from college, she let out a small laugh and asked why. “Cos people equal ****” he said.
“So…. Are you going somewhere after this?” asked Yuki. “Lab” said Tak. One word answers were his trademark. He finished his banana, threw the peel into the bin and stood up. As he started to walk, Yuki noticed the blood stains on his shoes. The normal black and white Chuck Taylors were now partly blood red.

“Wait for me, I’m going back to the lab as well” she said. She grabbed an apple and caught up to Tak. The two returned to the lab via the route that Tak had taken. Wondering why his shoes were bloody, Yuki thought about questioning it. But as they turned a corner, Yuki saw two unconscious bodies lying in what was now a big puddle of blood. It looked like an unreported crime scene. The rest of the trip back to the lab was very awkward. So awkward that once they got there, Yuki didn’t even say bye. For the rest of the day, Tak continued work on the Pandoran plants in silence.

The next day had come. Alpha Centuri A woke everyone up with its glow and warmth. Unlike most days, Tak had woken up early today. He managed to shower, get dressed, have breakfast and come back to the dorms to brush his teeth all by 9:43am. He then decided to walk to the labs. When he got there, he was approached by Dr. Augustine. Thinking he was in trouble, he looked away from her.

“Good job handsome.” She said. After a few seconds of confusion in the form of silence, Tak replied “……..ehhhh, what?”

Grace grinned and answered quietly “You know? The marines you kicked the **** out of yesterday? People heard about it but they still don’t know who’s responsible. Looks like you made sure those two didn’t remember anything ha? God, you’re amazing!”
Tak now had an annoyed look on his face. Grace noticed and continued.
“Don’t worry, I won’t tell anyone. Besides, no one knows who you are since you don’t talk a lot. OK?” She winked at him before walking away. Tak walked over to his desk.
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It was now 10:00am. Spotting Tak at his desk, Dr. Eileen walked to him.
“You ready?” she asked. Tak nodded. “Let’s go” she said. The two of them walked over to their links. The rest of the team was waiting. They all hopped into their links and woke up in their Avatars. Tak was lying in his Avatar sized bed. He looked around and spotted four other Avatars getting up as well. He went to the box at the end of his bed and took out his clothes. As he was getting dressed someone came to him. Kneeling down from tying his shoe lace, he turned around to see two blue legs. He looked up and saw a female Avatar. Dr. Eileen? Not quite sure of who it was, he stood right up and stared at the Avatar.

“Woooow, you really are big.” It was Dr. Eileen’s voice. As an Avatar, she was very good looking. With the perfect balance of human and Na’vi facial features and a slim body, she gave Dr. Augustine’s Avatar a run for her money. She walked over to the others and Tak followed slowly. The others couldn’t help but stare at how big Tak was.
“Daaaaamn, you’re huge!” said Dr. Dale.
“Oh. My. God.” Said Dr. Isaac, as if she had just seen the love of her life.
Dr. Brent was getting changed. Unaware of Tak’s presence, he turned around only to be shocked “WOW, Tak?” Tak slightly raised his hand. “Holy ****, you’re big!” Tak felt uncomfortable as he wasn’t used to getting this much attention. While tyring her shoe lace, Dr. Eileen explained the plan for the day to her team.

“OK gang, we’re going to take a trip down to the FEBA and see how our plants are doing. If we’re lucky we may be able stay a bit longer than usual.”
The others responded with shouts of joy and high fives like little kids while Tak stood there in silence, not knowing what they were getting so excited about. Dr. Brent then briefly explained to Tak. “Aw dude, you’re gonna love it.” Wasn’t much of an explanation, well it didn’t explain anything, but it seemed like a fun place. Once everyone got their backpacks and equipment they proceeded to the two Samsons that awaited them. Dr. Dale, Isaac and Brent went to one helicopter while Dr. Eileen and Tak went to another. A marine approached her.

“Good morning ma’am! Corporal Alan Major, I’ll be escorting you today.”
Tak couldn’t believe it. This was the third time he had encountered Alan. He walked to the helicopter and as he was about to get in, Alan greeted him as well.
“Good morning sir! Corporal Alan Major, I’ll be escorting you today.”
“Hi Alan” replied Tak. Alan was surprised as he recognized the Avatar’s voice.
“Tak?! WOW ****! DAMN! So that’s what you look like! Wooow, you’re big!”
Annoyed, the pilot told Alan to get on or be left behind. Alan got on and the helicopters took off.

The sights on the way to the FEBA were amazing. The never ending forest spread a green in all directions with river systems adding lines of blue. The occasional waterfalls were also spectacular, as they sent tons of water crashing down from tremendous heights to large pools which then continued back into a river. Tak was overwhelmed at the sights. He showed a bit of this through his facial expressions. For the whole trip his eyes were fixed on the beautiful sights that Pandora had to offer. He had completely forgot that he was going to be doing research as this felt like a dream holiday.

After hours of flying, they had finally reached the FEBA. The Samsons descended onto the landing pads. The team got off and made their way to the main building. The base at the FEBA was smaller than Hell’s Gate but was still large enough to house enough at least a hundred people. It was surrounded by very think vegetation. Beams of sunlight that managed to make their way through the forest canopy lit up parts of the forest floor. There were many shallow pools and rivers. This place was exploding with Pandoran life.

The team made their way through the thick forest. Everywhere few metres they travelled, it seemed to Tak that there was a new plant species or a new insect to look at. The colours were like nothing he had ever seen before. He felt an indescribable feeling as he walked through the forest. Dr. Eileen looked at Tak and knew that he was amazed by the look on his face. Alan was no different. He too was amazed at what he was seeing. While the other marine had his gun held up, ready to shoot, Alan had it pointing down as if he had totally forgotten that he had one. They continued to walk until they reached a group of Anemonids. As the Anemonids were spread over a large area, the group decided to split up. Dr. Dale, Isaac and Brent went with the other marine while Dr. Eileen and Tak went with Alan. They took samples and recorded all sorts of data. Alan was bombarding Dr. Eileen with questions. This annoyed Tak so he decided to move to another area where Alan’s voice couldn’t be heard.

After going through thick vegetation for a few minutes, Tak finally realized that it was completely quiet. He had also found a very large Anemonid which was exactly what Dr. Eileen was looking for. The larger the plant, the more metals it has absorbed over time. This would provide a lot of useful data. While examining the plant, he heard a noise. He looked around but saw nothing. Thinking nothing of it he continued his work. But then he heard another noise. Now he knew something was definitely stalking him. Surrounded by a thick wall of plants, he walked over to it and moved the leaves with his arm as if moving some blinds to look out a window. He took a good look, scanning the area. Nothing. He came to the conclusion that it was just an animal and decided to return to his work. When he turned around, he was greeted by three arrow tips right in his face.
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Ok I'm going to be blunt.
Tak is a prick.
Grace is acting a little too... promiscuous.

I'll keep reading the story because it has potential, but honestly I'm not a fan of any of the characters.
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thank you for reading the 3 chapters. Yes Tak is a prcik, he is actually based on me (so I'm a prick as well ) Last year I was pretty anti social, I didn't talk to anyone at uni however I decided to go see a councelor about it and I noticed I started to change a bit. I wanted ther same to apply for the main character as well, so hopefully as the story continues you will start to like him.

BTW thankyou for being honest as it will help me improve on my writing

I have a report due on friday and an exam to study for on friday as well so the rest of the week will be busy but I will continue with this on saturday

*With that said (about the relation between me and the main character) I am not the type who goes around looking for a fight, nor will I engage. Besides, I've never been a good fighter, but I wanted to make the character a tough one who takes no ****. In this story, there is alot of tension between scientists and soldiers where the soldiers always give the scientists a hard time. But anyway, I will say this. If you are an RDA fan than this story isn't for you

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Chapter 4

The three Na’vi warriors stood there with their bows pulled back as far as possible. They all stared aggressively at Tak who didn’t know what to think of the situation. Not knowing what he should do next, Tak thought to himself “Great, what now…” He took a good look at each of the warriors’ faces who were obviously not happy to see him. He then slowly took a step forward and as he did, one of the warriors slowly breathed through his nose as if he was about to release the arrow. But nothing. Tak then slowly took another step, and another. With every step he took, the Na’vi backed up.

“Ftang!” yelled one of the angered warriors.

Tak stopped. Surprised that he understood the command, the warrior gave him an even meaner look. But the Na’vi warriors were distracted by a slight sound coming from the branches above. It was just a Stingbat who had decided to land for some rest. Tak decided to take this very short opportunity at making a move. He quickly grabbed the arrow out of the hand of the closest Na’vi and grabbed him by the neck, using him as a shield.

The other two Na’vi instantly noticed and turned around with their arrows aimed at Tak’s face, who now had the disarmed arrow pressed against his hostage’s throat. Neither side was going to put down their weapons. Tak backed up very slowly with the hostage to his backpack. He then used his arrow holding arm to keep hold of his hostage around his neck while he used his free hand to search for the knife that was in the side compartment of the backpack. The Na’vi now had a chance at taking out Tak but for some reason they hesitated and decided not to risk it. With the knife now in his other hand, Tak pressed the knife to his hostages throat and let go of the arrow, now using this arm to hold his hostage around the neck. He then decided to make his way out of the small area he was working in and out into the open forest. The two Na’vi warriors followed, this time paying 100% of their attention to Tak’s every movements.

Meanwhile, back at where Dr. Eileen had been working, Alan had managed to slightly annoy even Dr. Eileen with his questions about what she was doing while also poorly checking the area for any dangers. She noticed Tak had been gone for quite some time and also wanting some alone time, she asked Alan to go and search for him. Without any argument, Alan headed off in search for Tak. He searched a large area as he wasn’t sure of which way Tak had disappeared to. However this was not a problem for him as Alan was very curious of his surroundings. This was his opportunity to observe the wonders of Pandora nice and close. He stumbled upon an Arachnoid climbing up a tree. He had never seen anything like it. It was similar to a Scorpion back on earth, but it was missing the large claws. Instead, it had a large abdomen which lead up to a pair of stingers that looked exactly like fangs on a poisonous snake. Its eyes, mouth and legs were all fixed around the hexagonal front section which had an opening in the front. Covered in a dark but slightly shiny purple with red on its legs and the tip of its stingers, this was one exotic looking creature. Alan stared at it until it noticed and got scared. It quickly ran away to the other side of the tree and up the trunk. That’s when Alan realized something. He then told himself “Hey! What the **** are you doing?! You’re not a kid anymore! Grow up and do your damn job!” Suddenly he went from adventurous child to serious adult and continued his search for Tak.

By now, Tak was getting impatient and wanted to get back to his work. But that wasn’t going to happen as long as the Na’vi warriors were there with their arrows pointed at him. But then one of the Na’vi eased off the pull on his bow and lowered it towards the ground. He dropped it and pulled out his dagger. Knowing what was about to happen, the other Na’vi smirked and also disarmed his weapon. With the dagger held tightly in his hand and a “I’m going to ****en kill you” look on his face, the Na’vi stepped forward and prepared himself for a fight. Tak breathed strongly and threw his hostage to the ground. Without even thinking about negotiating, he also stepped forward. The two faced each other, ready to die. As usual, Tak waited for his opponent to make the first move. And he didn’t have to wait long. The fierce Na’vi charged at Tak with his dagger and tried to stab him in the chest. Tak quickly dodged it. The Na’vi quickly turned around and went for another attempt but this time he tried to stab Tak in the stomach with un upwards strike. The knife sliced Tak’s forearm on the way up but he felt nothing as he was pumped with adrenaline. The Na’vi continued to take swings with his dagger in attempts to cut or stab his opponent but Tak kept on dodging them. The two Na’vi spectators were cheering for their friend to show the dreamwalker no mercy and kill him.
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Tak stepped back in order to create some space and regain his focus. The Na’vi took this short time to catch his breath but was quick to getting back into the fight. He pulled back his dagger and took a big swing at Tak’s chest and managed to cut the shirt but not the flesh. Once he reached the limit of his swing, he brought it back the other way for another. Tak grabbed the wrist with his left hand and pulled him in to try and stab his enemy in the gut. The extremely pissed off Na’vi saw this coming and decided to grab Tak’s wrist as well. The two of them had one hand holding on to the other’s wrist while the other was being held. They both struggled to let their hands free until Tak decided to knee the Na’vi in the gut and head butt him. A bit dizy for a split second, the Na’vi quickly regained his focus only to realize Tak was going to slice his neck. He ducked and moved to the side. Missing his chance to kill his opponent, Tak used the rotational motion from his swing to execute a kick which landed on the chest of the Na’vi and sent him to the ground.

Getting sick of using his knife, Tak threw it away and approached the Na’vi who was now on his back. The spectating Na’vi’s cheers had now turned into cries of concern as they shouted at their friend to get back up onto his feet. Desperate to do so, the Na’vi kicked forward to try and strike Tak in the face but was caught by the ankle. He then kicked his other foot along the ground to sweep Tak off his feet who also fell to the ground. The struggling Na’vi leaned towards his ankle to try and release Tak’s hand. As he went to do so, Tak grabbed him by the wrist again but this time Tak swung his legs around and place one foot on his opponent’s chest. With a hold of an arm and a leg together with a foot to the chest, Tak lifted him up, rolled on his back and threw the Na’vi and sent him flying above and behind who landed flat on his back. Seeing the Na’vi trying to get back up, Tak walked over to him and kicked the dagger out of his hand. He then grabbed his head by the hair and gave him some long overdue punches to the face. With a bloody nose and a lightly bruised face, the Na’vi’s vision was now going in circles.

Tak had enough with his first victim and now it was time to move to the next. Shocked at the defeat of the Na’vi Warrior, the other two Na’vi quickly grabbed their arrow loaded bows and pulled back, ready to fire at Tak. But not even a few arrows would stop Tak now, as intense rage was flowing through all parts of his body. The Na’vi knew this dreamwalker was no ordinary one, and so he had to be killed. Just when they were about to fire their arrows, a voice shouted out which caught everyone’s attention.

“Wow ****!” They all turned around to see Alan with his gun aimed at the hostile Na’vi, now looking a lot more serious than he was before.
“Hey Tak, you OK?” asked Alan. Tak replied with a slight nod.
“Doc wants to see you…. I think…… just grab your **** and let’s get out of here”

Tak went back for his back pack but as he was, the Na’vi he had delivered a beating to was getting back on his feet. With the dagger not so far away from him he picked it up and marched towards Tak. Alan noticed this.

“Hey! Don’t ****en move!” he shouted. But within the second he pointed his gun to his new target, one of the Na’vi with armed with a bow quickly took aim at Alan. Now up **** creek without a paddle, Alan contacted Dr. Eileen with his communication device.

“Doc? Dr. Eileen?”
“Yep? You find him?” she replied.
“Yeah, I did. And that’s not all.”

Not knowing what Alan was talking about, she asked “Um, OK….”
Knowing that he wasn’t been taken seriously he replied back. “Just get over here and see for yourself, like, now!” Noticing the seriousness in his voice, Dr. Eileen asked where he was. He roughly described the path that he took and so wasting no time, Dr. Eileen jogged over to the spot. As she approached the site, her voice could be heard increasing in volume.

“Alan, Alan? Alan where are you? Alan? Hey, where ar- ohhhhh ****.” Suddenly witnessing what Alan had got himself into, Dr. Eileen stood there with her mouth slightly open.

“Yeah, so ahhhhhh. Maybe you could talk to them? If you know their language that is.” Said Alan who had his finger on the trigger, ready to pull if necessary. However he noticed that the Na’vi who was aiming at him was not paying attention to him, but instead to Dr. Eileen. The Na’vi opened his mouth for a few seconds then spoke.

“….Gillian?” he said with an accent. Dr. Eileen looked at him and was surprised to see a familiar face.
“Aketuan?” She replied.

The Na’vi closed his eyes and sighed as a sign of relief.
“Holy ****, I was getting really worried there for a sec. Hey Alan, it’s ok. You can point your gun away.” said Dr. Eileen. Alan couldn’t help but exclaim.

“What?! Wha- you know this guy?! he replied.
“Yeah, well look, just put the gun down and I’ll explain later ok? Aketuan, it’s ok. He’s with me.”

By now everyone was aware of Dr. Eileen’s presence and the fact that this had got rid of the hostility between the two groups. She walked over to the other two Na’vi and greeted them. However they weren’t happy to see her. The other Na’vi who was holding a bow yelled at Dr. Eileen in Na’vi. Tak’s opponent kept silent as he was too angry to even open his mouth.

“You said no more dreamwalkers!” he yelled. Dr. Eileen did her best to try and explain.
“I know and I’m sorry. But he was sent to me. I’m sorry.”

Not knowing what the hell was going on, Tak walked over to Dr. Eileen and stared at her with a slightly angry look.
“What the ****.” he said with no emotion. The look on his face demanded an explanation and so Dr. Eileen went ahead to do so.
“Yeah, really sorry about this. I should’ve told you about the locals.”
“…..Locals?......”
“Yep, the Takahayo tribe.”

it's 12:32 am and i'm tired.... i will start on chapter 5 tomorow
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hmm, been meaning to read this for a few days, just got around to it. Not bad, although I really don't think that someone from the Avatar program would attack the Na'vi like that.
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hmm, been meaning to read this for a few days, just got around to it. Not bad, although I really don't think that someone from the Avatar program would attack the Na'vi like that.
oh yeah! another person read my story! thanks alot
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oooo! i just read the first part of Chapter two, and wow! haha i like what he did to the marines... standing up for himself LOL! and "he was one sexy Avatar" LOL!!
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oooo! i just read the first part of Chapter two, and wow! haha i like what he did to the marines... standing up for himself LOL! and "he was one sexy Avatar" LOL!!
thanks for readin i've been really busy with reports and stuff but i will defenetily get started on chapter 5 this week. maybe friday night
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