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Old 08-18-2011, 05:09 PM
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Why I fight

The ground rumbled with thunder as hooves pounded the dirt and the sky was filled with screeches and the flapping of wings. The beat of war drums rumbled through the air as the heart of the warriors’ moral. Jake stood with his arm resting against a tree at the edge of a small, empty clearing in the forest. He searched his thoughts as the clamor of the clans raged around him. They would all be heading into battle soon and Jake knew this.

He sensed a presence approach from behind him. He looked behind him through the corner of his eye. It was Neytiri. He thought so because he knew what it was to be in her presence. He took a deep breath and turned to her.

They haven’t had any time to talk alone. They needed to talk.

“Oel Ngati Kameie” Jake said.

“I see you” Neytiri said surprisingly in his language. Jake could sense hesitation and emotional conflict in her voice. Neytiri broke eye contact to form the words.

“Jake…” She muttered “I…”

“Don’t!” Jake cut in. “Look, you don’t have to forgive me.”

Surprised, Neytiri looked up and took a step forward.

“But… if you’re not here for forgiveness, then why have you returned?”

Jake looked away for a moment after she finished her question. He turned away and leaned against the tree again.

“I came back… because of something that the sky people taught me.”

Neytiri walked up to his side.

“‘Leave no man behind.’ ”

He didn’t tell her much about himself or his life before he came to her. This was probably the chance to tell her. He moved from the tree and sat down on a log in the clearing. Neytiri followed and sat beside him.

“Before I came here, I choose to be a warrior because I thought it would be good to prove that I could be someone special. To pass any test a man could pass.” His tone was cold and flat.

“On my way to being a warrior, I learned what it meant to be one of them. For hundreds of years, there were many wars between many Sky people. And so many people innocent people died because of stupid and selfish reasons. In the army I was in, many of us believed we could fight to make a difference; to save lives and to have them live free.”

Neytiri looked away for a moment to think about what he said. Sky people fighting other sky people for their own gain… that made sense to her because she saw what they’ve done to her people. But from what she heard from him made her think about the sky people more.

“When I finally got through training, I was eager to fight. But I was sent to fight in a minor conflict that was just stupid to have been started in the first place. And during a battle, I was hit. After I recovered, I couldn’t feel my legs and I couldn’t walk again. I was basically finished before I could get started.”

Neytiri tilted her head back in confusion.

“You were hurt and you could not walk again? But how do you walk as one of us?”

“Because this body doesn’t have that wound. The machines that I and other dreamwalkers go into place our sprits into these bodies. But that doesn't matter right now."

He took a deep breath before he continued, “I’m guessing you want me to tell you how I got into this mess in the first place, huh?”

Slowly, she nodded.

“It started with me finding out my brother was dead.” Neytiri shook with empathy when the words left his lips.

“Hell... him being dead is the whole reason I’m here.” Jake realized.

He turned his head to look at her. Slowly, he reached over took her hand into his.

“He was the one who was supposed to come here. He was a scientist like Norm and Grace.” He then placed her hand onto his chest. “He was the one who was supposed to have this body, not me.” He then released her hand. “Because he was dead, the sky people came looking for me to take his place just so they can save their money. I was basically an accident.”

Jake took a pause to collect his thoughts and to let Neytiri collect hers.

“When I got here, nobody really liked me, not even Grace. She thought I was just another one of the careless bastards who just get paid to shoot anything they saw. But those bastards found an opportunity with me. Because I was able to dreamwalk, they ordered me to come to you an’...” Jake paused, “Well… Y’know.”

“At first I didn’t know to think because they offered to fix my legs when I was done here.”

He looked over at her and saw a battle of emotions in her eyes. She didn’t know what to think. She didn’t know if she should be angry or to feel sorry.

“Half-way through it, I didn’t know what to do about it; after everything I’ve seen, everything I’ve done… and after everything I felt. But when it all went wrong, when they saw me trying to stop the dozer, they thought I was a traitor. Everything I worked for was lost; I wouldn’t get to walk when I went home.

“And because I was not an effective way of diplomacy any more, they lost their patience and brought the rain to Hometree. I...” he stopped. He couldn’t finish his thought because he felt he might point the finger at her. He did not want to hurt her… not after what he saw her go through.

He looked over at Neytiri again but her head was turned away. Jake felt he explained enough and just placed his hand on her shoulder.

“Look… I just want to let you know that… I’m sorry.” Neytiri slowly turned her head to meet his eyes. “I'm sorry that I lied. I’m sorry that I hurt you. And I’m sorry that I couldn’t stop them from attacking Hometree. I don’t care if this thing is enough to make up for all of that.” He made a gesture to the soaring Ikrans and the warriors riding them.

“I just don’t want any more of this world to suffer. It’s been through enough. That's why I fight.”

Jake lifted his hand off of Neytiri’s shoulder. He lifted himself up and walked away. Neytiri remained on the log and watched Jake disappear into the now twilit forest. She looked out across brush and images flowed through her head.
She recalled the moment when Jake confessed to the clan that he was sent to them just to get them to move. She recalled the feeling of shouting out in anger at him when she realized she was betrayed and heard him when he was asking for forgiveness. The moment where they were all waiting for the sky people to come and they heard Jake and Grace shouting at them to escape. The moment when they were running from the flames set to Hometree, seeing Jake tied up, struggling to be free, and leaving him behind. And screaming in agony over her father’s body and screaming at Jake to leave and to never return.

But she also recalled the events before the cataclysm came upon her people. She remembered the moments of being Jake’s teacher; a clumsy student at first but making remarkable progress. She remembered the feeling when she soared through the air alongside Jake after he claimed his own ikran.

But she recalled one moment the most:

I’ve already chosen…but this woman must also choose me.

She already has.


She came to her feet… and ran.
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Old 08-18-2011, 05:15 PM
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Jake strolled through the iridescent scenery. He stopped when he heard a voice shout out his name from behind him. Jake turned just in time to see Neytiri leap forward and clasp herself to him. Jake was completely off guard and nearly lost his balance.

“I forgive you.” She muttered with her check pressed hard against the side of his neck. He could feel tears drop onto his skin when she sobbed, “Now… I m-must ask for your f-forgiveness.”

Jake hesitated in his response, “Wha…? Y-You don’t haf’ta apal-”

“Kehe!” Neytiri pulled back abruptly away from him, her face now soaked. “You are only saying these things because you feel the truth will hurt me!”

“Wha …uh… no … it’s just…”

“STOP!” She shouted. And he did.

“You came to us and we taught you so much. We thought you could not learn. I thought you could not learn. But you did.

“I thought you to be like the rest of the sky people. But if what you said about yourself is true, then you were true warrior. You could have seen before. You only needed to open your eyes.”

Jake took a moment to think about what she said about him. “Well, how do you know that? Isn’t fighting for something bigger than yourself just what a regular warrior does? And why is that something to get upset about?”

“I know because I saw it in your eyes when you were my student.” She continued. “You never gave up. You were braver than any of the sky people. You were braver than most of the people. And you came back to us all. That is the bravest thing I have seen anyone do.”

“Then why the hell are you crying your eyes out?!” Jake firmly said to her.

“Because…” She chocked up again. “I… left you.”

Jake stood in silence for a moment. “I don’t care about that. You had a right to be angry at me, right?”

“You wanted the people to leave hometree so they would not be hurt,” Neytiri started. “You cared about the people. You wanted to help, and we only saw you as one of them. We did not listen. And you could have died.”

“Hey, hey” Jake insisted “If you’re upset because you didn’t know that I would be-”

“THAT DOES NOT MATTER!” she shouted before he could finish. “We were mated, Jake! Mates do not leave each other to die.” She stopped when she couldn’t hold back a sob.

Jake stood silent as she bent her head down and continued to shed her tears.
“I chose you, Jake. And you chose me.” She muttered when she got her breath back. “From our Tsahaylu, I knew you were the man I thought you were. Even when I told you to leave, deep down, I still loved you.” She lost herself in her sobs again. “You could have died and I would have been alone. I would have been… b-blind… with anger and… h-hate f-for-”

Shhhh Jake gently placed his hands on her shoulders.

“It’s okay.” He said trying to comfort her. She looked into his eyes as he spoke, “If you think you screwed up… Well, then I’ve already forgiven you.”
Her body gave way to relief immediately and she placed her hands on his shoulders. After a moment she broke their silence.

“Do… do you still… w-want me?”

Jake took in a breath, “I have seen a few women come and go in my sorry ass life before. But none of them come even close to you. Being with you makes me feel like I’m actually someone; someone who has a life worth living. I would be willing to look after you. But I would only be happy if you would be happy to live the rest of your life with me. It’s your choice.”

Neytiri lifted up her hand and gently placed it on his cheek. “I chose you before, Jake. And I choose you now.”

After a second, Jake calmly gave his answer, “Then yes, I choose you.”

Neytiri relaxed her body when she heard his answer. Both of them stood silent for awhile until Jake leaned forward and gave her a gentle kiss and she accepted it. Jake saw another tear escape her eye when they met each other’s gaze again.

“Please,” Jake said coolly “I feel like I’m being torn apart when you’re sad.”

She produced a vague grin and responded, “This is not of sorrow. It is… of joy”

Relieved, Jake gave a brief grin back. After a pause, she came closer and embraced him.

Neytiri closed her eyes and took in deep breaths as she rested her head on his shoulder. Jake held her and gently rubbed her back with his hand. He, too, closed his eyes and gently caressed his cheek against her hair. Both of them swayed back and forth in the iridescent glow; together in each other’s arms again.

Jake came back to fight for something he thought was worth fighting for. He didn’t want anything out of it except to see the sun rise for the people who had seen a shadow thrust upon them. But now, he had another reason to fight. And that reason is a reason to live.

Author's note: I wanted to improve my original story a bit so the morals are more clear and the characters are more realistic and more developed. So can you give me some reveiws and such? Please and thank you.

P.S. I just got my account on Fan-fic.net and I need some advice on how to post and format my storys. If anyone here is a fan-fic member, please lend me some advice. Please and thank you again.
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Old 08-18-2011, 08:04 PM
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Old 08-19-2011, 07:52 PM
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Very good story, I really enjoy the interactions between Jake and Neytiri and the emotions expresssed between them. It would be cool if you maybe add some more, like perhaps a scene after the battle. Something that gives good closeur(sp?) the the things expressed here.

Either way, I really enjoyed reading it. And very good messages inbedded in the story as well.
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Old 08-19-2011, 11:25 PM
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Very good story, I really enjoy the interactions between Jake and Neytiri and the emotions expresssed between them. It would be cool if you maybe add some more, like perhaps a scene after the battle. Something that gives good closeur(sp?) the the things expressed here.

Either way, I really enjoyed reading it. And very good messages inbedded in the story as well.
That was exactly what I was working on after matha nd the carnage. But now I have an idea of doing things from before the war and way after in chapters now that I'm on FanFiction.net

Yea the reason that I wrote this was to show no matter how curl and selfish humans can be, there are the few who would give up anything to see the sun rise again.
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