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Old 03-29-2012, 05:21 PM
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Hey guys, about a year and a half ago, I wrote Kxani Yawne, the first ever Lesbian Na'vi Fanfiction. However, I wanted to go further and write an A/U based on a romance between Neytiri and Ninat.

Originally, I got about 1,200 words into the project before it got deleted and I gave up, however after seeing a screenshot of the original work, I'd love to rewrite it. I'll do it if I feel enough people will read it!


http://dl.dropbox.com/u/7147976/Mobi...%2017%20PM.jpg

Is the original story, or a paragraph from it, and just to let you know the story will be M in parts, with a lemon included... Idk TOS's rules regarding this so let me know!

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Old 03-29-2012, 06:46 PM
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May I ask, why's it called "Fresh Berries"?
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Old 03-29-2012, 08:38 PM
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Well it was originally based on the idea of 'lemon' being sexual in stories but to be funny, I changed it to Berries, and in keeping with fruit for sexual content such as 'limes' and 'lemons' 'Fresh Berries' was born
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Old 03-29-2012, 10:27 PM
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Fresh Berries

For : Tree-Of-Souls, HumanNoMore, Eltu, Thorinair, Leonopteryx, Kevin (Fkeutian), Mr, Eonmokri, Comedianmasta, Cza, Mr, Sacred and Mune, and Everyone else who believed in me, or read Kxani Yawne.

NOTE FROM AUTHOR: FRESH BERRIES CONTAINS FEMSLASH! PLEASE DO NOT CONTINUE TO READ IF YOU DO NOT LIKE F/F RELATIONSHIPS.

Neytiri was anxious. The rumors were spreading like wildfire, growing everyday, and she knew sooner or later she'd have to confront them. It had been going on for a while now, members of clan had found it upon themselves to spread malicious, hurtful comments regarding both herself, and Ninat.

Ninat wasn't like the other females in the clan, and everyone knew it. She had made it quite clear for some time that unlike the others, she had no desire to choose a male to mate with, she was only interested in the females. But this wasn't the problem that was bothering Neytiri. The issue was that others for some reason or another, believed that Neytiri was Ninat's mate.

She wasn't -- Of course, that was one thing she was absolutely sure of. She'd never even thought of the idea before the rumors had started. In fact, she hadn't really been too close to Ninat, that's what she didn't understand, there was no base for any argument like this! She wasn't Ninat's mate! And she didn't like females in that way!

Dawn was approaching, to Neytiri it had felt like she'd only been away for minutes, but it must have been hours. She'd ran away from their clan for time alone, she just needed to clear her head, the sky grew dark, and lights ascended from the heavens, clouding the blue haze with a glare of beauty, unlike anything on earth.

Neytiri sighed, and climbed down from the large tree which she'd occupied for hours, as her legs touched the ground she shivered, the sun was rapidly declining, and she was absolutely sure she wouldn't make it home before other's started to worry.
"Great, why did I even have to come out here?" Neytiri thought, mentally scoulding herself. It was then she felt it, that feeling, that someone's watching you. Neytiri spun around on the spot, coming face to face with non other than the source of all the problems awaiting her once she arrived home.

"Ninat?" Ninat smiled at the sound of Neytiri's voice, before speaking herself. "I thought you were out here Neytiri, it's just like you."
Neytiri scowled. What did Ninat know about her? Nothing, absolutely nothing. "What's wrong Neytiri? You look like something's upsetting you." Neytiri opened her mouth to shout at Ninat, but was cut off. "I'm here to help you know, always. You know that right?"



This is a preview, it hasn't gone through spell check ,or even been proof read. Please tell me if I should continue! Thanks!
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Old 04-02-2012, 06:38 PM
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You have my vote? You should just write it regardless of who cares, if you want to
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Old 04-02-2012, 09:49 PM
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I'll continue writing it Will write 2-3 chapters then post it for you <3
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I agree with Loco, you should write it because you enjoy it and have a story to tell.
Write and the readers will follow or something
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