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Old 04-30-2010, 01:28 PM
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This one is about my meditation sessions where I go to Pandora and become a Na'vi.

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I use myself,
To escape myself.
To be a different person,
In another land.

Drifting...
Everything somehow feels,
Ethereal, inconsistant...
Still beautiful.

It takes,
A time to transfer,
And then...
Freedom.

Someone else,
Somwhere else,
Sometime else,
Unbecoming.

Still I remain,
The same soul,
In this...
Borrowed being.

Hearing chorus,
Seeing glow,
Feeling love,
Completely enveloped.

Moving wildly,
Singing loud,
The tempo forges,
In the core.

I...

I feel...

Nothing,
But...







Hapiness.
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Old 04-30-2010, 03:12 PM
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You have a real talent at this... This one really feels so true...

It makes me think of being Na'vi too... I wish I could
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Old 04-30-2010, 06:07 PM
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I like your use of the last line in each stanza. The last lines seem to bring together the rest of their respective stanzas to a sort of point of emphasis.
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Old 04-30-2010, 10:45 PM
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Thanks both of you, i'm glad you enjoyed.
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Old 04-30-2010, 11:07 PM
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Really great poem there. It brings a feeling from deep inside out.
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Old 05-01-2010, 10:56 AM
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Third time I try to comment this poem, and it's just breathtaking. Your latest work is simply good, better than most of modern poetry I read.

You should make a book with your poems
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I love it. Feel true, go deep to my soul, make me believe more in Pandora. Seriously, it touch me.
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Old 05-01-2010, 01:35 PM
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Thanks so much everyone, it means a lot to me. Really glad you enjoyed it.
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