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Old 05-02-2010, 03:46 PM
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This is the first creative thing I've written in 3 or 4 years. I have no idea how to write such things properly, this probably does it horrifically wrong, please go easy on me

so far away
my home

where I should be

this world is not
right for me

I want to live
to escape

didn't want this life
the same thing every day

I want to be free
find my own way

born on the wrong world?
I don't belong

"This is how it was meant to be"?
So wrong...

Optimism turned to emptiness
now I See

I feel less of this world
all the time

beyond this world
life waits for me

I'm trapped here
alone and empty

hopelessly in love
I want to be free

It seems so pointless
same thing every day
work your life away

For what?
pointless things.

I saw another way
distant

I live in my dreams
so far away

why do I go on?
face another day

so empty inside
I can never explain what's wrong

so many people, so blind
never realise what's missing

my life feels distant
so far away

what went wrong?

so lonely, feeling empty

wishing, dreaming
of a world far away



maybe...
someday...

until then I dream

but how real it seems.




Just a few thoughts I had walking home, I felt I had to do something with them. Took me ages, didn't turn out as well as I hoped, but this is still the best creative thing I've ever written, I think
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Old 05-02-2010, 03:50 PM
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Those words goes straight into my heart, HumanNoMore.

What you wrote holds such high meaning for the very way I think - incredibly beautiful, ma tsmukan.
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Old 05-02-2010, 04:04 PM
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Really, really beautiful HNM. Words straight from the heart, they generate a lot of imagery for me. I enjoyed it a lot.
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Old 05-02-2010, 04:36 PM
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Oel ngati kameie, ma HNM. I really enjoyed reading your poem. I just hope that humanity will change, someday... but I know that when it will happen, it will be always too late.

Anyway, we DO See just like you, and knowing this gives me strength.
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Old 05-04-2010, 12:02 AM
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Thank you all so much

I'm glad you liked it, this took me ages to write and I very nearly didn't post it because I wasn't sure if it was good.
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Old 05-04-2010, 01:37 AM
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Clear, concise and has a nice rhythm and obviously deep emotion to it.
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Old 05-09-2010, 11:02 PM
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nice poem, and i can sort of relate to it as now i'm so busy at uni. it feels like as soon as i finish one thing another thing comes up and i feel like life is just about work and more work and more work......
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