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Old 07-29-2010, 07:11 AM
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Here are three poems I wrote tonight. There are a lot of new poems I'll need to check out in this subsection...


"Unworthy Dreamer"

I fall short of the gods I create in my dreams
Two extremes - I'm captured in between
Reaching out, finger tips leave me
As I scratch and heave, limp and weave
For a spot I reserved for the image of me
An imagined counterfeit - magnifying my soul
As I realized and am told
I am not worthy to be seated
By the gods I created in my dreams



"My Moment with the Dead - a Realization"

I see the daisy demonstrating days of yester
My mind hypnotized by the inticing buffet of memory
Sitting beside me are people that passed so peacefully
Reminiscing to me about their dreams and misery
Wishing to be flesh like me so blissfully
Instantly I share their memories and emotions
Like oceans I can see no end immediately
But their reels wind thin as we approach their death day
Celebrated as the beginning to their new eternity
Tears fill their dreams as their souls brittle
Prepared to be ejected from body to heaven
While I snap back to the present
And realize the gift: That I am still living



"Diseased Thought"

Diseased is thought and it spreads
Throughout my head to the ends
As my brain is imprisoned in intermission
Thought after thought distorted as truth
Can't tell the difference
Can't get my mind loose
Thought after thought feeds frighteningly freely
Tainting reality to the soul within me
A nightmare where I can't be awakened
Can't break free
Can't be sane again
My emotions swell up like violent oceans
In the recess of my own distress caused erosions
As the world carries on
In front of my eyes colored blind
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Old 07-30-2010, 07:35 AM
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Incredible, all of them. Both "Unworthy Dreamer" and "My Moment with the Dead - a Realization" I find particularly resonating, and the imagery you used in "My Moment..." is just great.
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Old 07-31-2010, 03:05 PM
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Excellent, excellent writing. I agree with what Empty Glass said. All of them are brilliant.

Unworth Dreamer was the one that spoke to me in particular. I can empathise with that so well...
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Old 08-05-2010, 05:31 AM
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Thank you, both. I should have more time in the coming days to catch up on all the poetry I've missed out on since my last visit to this subsection...
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