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Old 03-25-2010, 10:51 AM
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Emotion,
Is a mixed beast.

Once it comforts you,
Cradles you in it's warmth,
Then without warning,
It turns.

It thrashes.
It claws.
It tears.
Seeking vengeance...

Until only fine shreds remain.

It can be done,
The beast can be vanquished.
But requires copious amounts,
Of love and tenderness.

Emotion,
Is a mixed beast.

Once it utterly destroys you,
Vicious and unremorseful.
Then without warning,



It turns once again.

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A poem describing exactly how I feel at this very moment.
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Old 03-25-2010, 11:16 AM
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it's a great poem but you musn't be like that please... you're a young boy be happy, go out with your friends our just talk about things but don't let yourself be unhappy for that. love is important in life yeah, but other things too .joining life with a smile on your face
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Old 03-25-2010, 03:09 PM
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I know I shouldn't be like this, I just feel really down right now and I like to express my emotions through words.

Thanks all the same though.
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Old 03-25-2010, 04:21 PM
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You write some amazing things... Makes me wish I could write anything decent...
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Old 03-25-2010, 04:58 PM
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You write some amazing things... Makes me wish I could write anything decent...
I'm sure you can, I like to think everyone can. You should have a go at it.

And thank you very much for the compliment, your words mean a lot.
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Old 03-25-2010, 08:28 PM
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Answer:

Ma friend,
you know I am here
for everything you want
and need

Ma friend,
you know I will stay
no matter what
or where

Ma friend
I will follow you.
I'll be the sandals of your feet
the blowing wind on your back
your sadness consoling arms
and the guardian of your sleep.
To the end of the world,
ma friend.


It'll probably sound sissy and all, but it's the best I can do being a non-native and making poetry only in Spanish.
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Old 03-25-2010, 08:38 PM
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I absolutely loved it ZenitYerkes, very, very nice indeed. Comforting.

I'm still waiting to read your "The Girl" update, i'm afraid i'm a little busy at the moment.
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Old 03-26-2010, 09:07 PM
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Emotion,
Is a mixed beast.

Once it utterly destroys you,
Vicious and unremorseful.
Then without warning,



It turns once again.

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A poem describing exactly how I feel at this very moment.
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Old 03-26-2010, 10:37 PM
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Eywa ngahu! If I may call you brother, and I offer *hugs*
Thank you very much Seshat Tsahìk, your words comfort me.
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Old 03-27-2010, 06:57 AM
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You're very creative Fkeu'itan:
Many creative people-musicians, poets and writers alike write best when they have emotion and feelings behind them.
It helps to pour things onto paper so to speak, it actually helps you release bad feelings and make you feel good again.
I wonder what else you can come up with when you are in different moods?
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Old 03-27-2010, 01:26 PM
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You're very creative Fkeu'itan:
Many creative people-musicians, poets and writers alike write best when they have emotion and feelings behind them.
It helps to pour things onto paper so to speak, it actually helps you release bad feelings and make you feel good again.
I wonder what else you can come up with when you are in different moods?
Thank you very much and I agree whole-heartedly. Some of the best work has been created when the creator has hit rock bottom or is at the very top of the world. It leads to a much truer experience for the reader and indeed the writer when it is composed while in such extreme mindsets.

Also, like you said, it is a great release for pent-up issues. Immediately after writing this, I began to feel better. As if a great weight had been lifted off my shoulders.
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Old 03-28-2010, 04:51 AM
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Maybe then you should continue writing, unless you get writers block..
That's great news though!
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Réalisant mon espoir, Je me lance vers la gloire. Je ne regrette rien. (Making my hope come true, I hurl myself toward glory. I regret nothing.)
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Old 03-28-2010, 07:22 PM
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Maybe then you should continue writing, unless you get writers block..
That's great news though!
I will definitely continue writing and as long as I have my emotions, I don't think I will ever get writer's block.
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Old 03-31-2010, 02:27 AM
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whoah that poem was pretty sweet, great work keep it up , great expression of emotions. Hope you feel better though.
Thanks hocsba and yes, I feel much better now thank you.
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Old 04-12-2010, 12:52 PM
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glad you feel better. Even though it makes you write wonderfull poems! there is a sense of loss and pain in it that you captured well in these words.
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