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Old 04-14-2010, 09:24 PM
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Sometimes I look through
the cold glass of a window.
Sometimes I see beyond
the four walls that surround me
Sometimes I dare to let
my mind run free
on an invisible grass that grows
over the ground's concrete.

Sometimes,
I dream of the ancient past
when no building rose on the horizon
and no motor roared;
only silence on the road
could be heard.

Sometimes I can hear
the gentle breeze of May
whispering to my ear its everlasting poem.

Sometimes, I believe
we'd gone the wrong way.
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Old 04-14-2010, 11:00 PM
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Very very beutiful Zenit, I can truly say Oel ngati kameie.
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Old 04-15-2010, 04:21 AM
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So true...
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Old 04-15-2010, 08:20 AM
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A really beautiful and utterly true poem, ZenitJerkes.

Oel ngati Kameie.
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Old 04-15-2010, 01:35 PM
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so haunting Zenity . its like i could feel the ancient of the land speaking up to you. *hugs*
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Old 04-15-2010, 09:05 PM
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touching. and so true. and it leaves a echo of silence after you read it. beautifull
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Old 04-15-2010, 09:30 PM
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Thanks people, I never thought it could end up with you liking it so much.

Thank you very much.
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Old 04-18-2010, 01:30 PM
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I like the way you build up to your last line. Gives it an added punch of sorts.
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Old 04-27-2010, 06:43 PM
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Very nice. I like how it starts of upbeat, gets gradually more negative and regresses to nothing.
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