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Love Rekindled.
(Hi guys, just a heads up, characters are changed from the movie, consequences are changed from the movie, and deaths that happened in the movie, might not have happened in my universe that the story is based in!)
Love Rekindled: Chapter 1 Jake awoke amongst his fellow Omaticaya, the wreckage of the great battle still scattered around the landscape, the smell of burning lingering in the air. He stood up, and quietly walked past the sleeping Na’vi. Gazing out onto the bioluminescent glow of Pandora, he sighed inwardly, thinking of the Na’vi who had given their lives to protect Pandora’s innocence. Most importantly for Jake, his first love, Neytiri, had given her life protecting him from Parker Selfridge’s machines. Every night since, Jake had gazed into the stars of Pandora, seeing Neytiri’s face shining in amongst the stars. He thought of her often, of how his life could have been with her, how her life would have been, if that bastard Selfridge hadn’t had to take one final swipe at Jake and the Omaticaya by launching several AMP Suits into their village. As Jake stared, he felt a lone tear of loss roll down his face, and returned to the hammocks. Tsu’tey watched Jake wake up in the night, and stroll to the cliff-face overlooking the water. Jake had done this every night since the great battle, and since the loss of Neytiri. Tsu’tey longed to tell Jake what he felt, but feared Jake’s reaction to his words. Jake just seemed completely lost, and alone. Tsu’tey wanted to remedy this; he had long held feelings for Jake, but none that had ever left his mouth. “Too soon, it’s too soon” muttered the voices in his head; he shook them away, and tried to return to sleep. Tossing and turning restlessly, he couldn’t budge the feeling that Jake was alone. Sitting up, he looked over to where Jake was standing, and saw the same tear scroll down his face that did every night. Tsu’tey’s heart ripped in two to see Jake so alone, but still, the voices told him it was too soon... Upon waking, Jake knew he had a hard day in front of him. It was the same every morning, and would be till the Omaticaya settled in their new home. Jake rubbed his face, muttering the word “faysawtute” as he thought about the race he used to belong to. He caught himself in the thought, and said to himself “I’m not one of those things, I never was, I was always a Na’vi, here on Pandora” Groggily, he got to his feet, and glanced around the place he had slept in. It was a tiny patch of moss between the Vitraya Ramunong and the roots of the trees surrounding. Jake had given up his hammock to a family, they needed it much more than he did. Walking towards the centre of the village, he spotted Mo’at and Eytukan sitting with some children. Jake nodded to Eytukan and continued to walk towards the other clan members, seeing Tsu’tey looking at him out of the corner of his eye... Tsu’tey hadn’t slept at all that night, too busy was his mind full of thoughts about Jake, Neytiri, and the future of his clan. In fact, when he felt the first rays of sunlight touch his skin, he sat up, and stared at Jake’s prone form, sleeping peacefully. When Jake had awoken in the morning, Tsu’tey pretended to be asleep, and as soon as he thought Jake had passed, he sat up, and continued to stare after him. All the emotions Tsu’tey had ever felt ran through him as soon as he laid eyes on Jake, coursing through his veins like fire. He felt energized, and seeing that Jake was heading over to the other clan hunters, he got up and followed him. Jake was busy giving a speech on what they had to do today, and assigning tasks to each of the hunters. Tsu’tey stood back and observed, and then slowly moved inward into view. He immediately noticed Jake’s eye’s shift towards him, and they seemed to soften and Jake smiled....Or was that just his wishful thinking? Tsu’tey didn’t care whether it was or not, he let it fill him with a warm glow that radiated out in a smile. Preparing the hunters was no small task, especially after the fall of Hometree. The hunters were unsettled at best, near maniacal at worst. Jake was determined to get some shelters up for the clan today, and needed some time to him...to figure out how to go on without Neytiri. He saw Tsu’tey bustle in from the right of the crowd, and smiled warmly at him. Tsu’tey had been incredibly caring for Jake after he lost Neytiri, always watching out for him, helping him with things. Jake swore that Tsu’tey wanted to ask something, it just wouldn’t come out, but every time Jake inquired about a question to Tsu, he blew him off and tried to change the subject. When Jake smiled at Tsu, he returned a smile, which made Jake blush for some reason, and he quickly turned away, continuing to prepare the hunters for their tasks... (END CHAP 1) So, guys and gals, that is chapter one. For those of you who liked it, thanks a lot! For those who didn’t, that’s fine too, as long as its not something as naive as “Neytiri is dead” or “Tsu’tey and Jake? That’s just wrong!” - Constructive criticism is always welcome, and I will try to improve it as time progresses. EDIT** : Title: Love Rekindled |
Haha, I thought you'd choose this pairing :)
Nothing much to say, except try to make it longer (i'm a hypocrite :P) |
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I just checked, about 20 Neytiri fans came to read this, and consequently they are screaming in terror, 29 views, and the only comment is you. :D |
Chapter 2:
That evening, the hunters left the small village around the Vitraya Ramunong in search of food and shelter for the clan. Jake went with them this time, he needed to clear his head of strange thoughts he had been having since this morning and his brief exchange with Tsu’tey. He kept replaying the scene in his head, he swore that Tsu just sought Jake out when he was around, but then when he actually came face to face with him, he would become all shy and wouldn’t speak much. Jake had blushed this morning when Tsu had smiled at him! “Why would I do that? It’s not like I had anything to blush about...” He was so distracted that he nearly walked into a group of Titanothere. None of it seemed to click in his head. He HAD to ask Tsu’tey today what he wanted to ask him, and if he wouldn’t tell him, Jake would MAKE him. This unknown was messing with his head. -- Back at the base that was once “Hells Gate” for the sawtute, Grace Augustine was busy researching a plant they had found around the base of the Vitraya Ramunong. It was a strange plant, with very strange properties, but Grace wasn’t really concentrating, she was busy thinking about how to get food, water, and all the other things needed for her tawtute friends. It was difficult, living on Pandora, when half of your friends cannot eat what you eat, and cannot go outside without breathing masks. She slumped onto a bed, legs hanging off the end and thought about possible solutions to this. She could send her friends back to Earth, although that would be morally wrong, these people worked just as hard to save the Na’vi as Jake did, and he gets to stay. The idea of sending the shuttle back to Earth was obviously impossible, 6 years flight time WITH a light speed drive, without one, the time nearly doubles. Not to mention they would need incredible amounts of fuel and even when they got to Earth, the RDA would just arrest them anyway. The only plan she could see working was going to take about 12 years anyway, and they had enough food for about 8. It was a risky one, but she was going to have to do it. “I have to make everyone Avatars... So what has a woman got to do to get a damn cigarette in this place?” -- Eytukan glanced at Tsu’tey, sitting on his own in the corner. Something was obviously troubling his friend, standing up and brushing past Mo’at and the other clan members, he walked over to Tsu’tey. “What is troubling you brother?” he inquired. Tsu’tey remained silent for a long while, before inhaling deeply, and speaking slowly and deliberately; “I feel alone, and lost”. Eytukan knew of Tsu’tey’s sadness over the loss of his daughter, Neytiri. They were supposed to be a mated pair, before “Jake Sully” had entered the clan, and mated with her instead. He thought that Tsu’tey had long overcome this issue; Eytukan had been convinced when Jake showed great honour and aptitude at defending their people from the sky-people. But yet, something was troubling Tsu’tey still, and he had to question him further “Why are you feeling this, and for how long?” Tsu’tey’s eyes seemed to lose focus, and he stared into the distance for a long time before replying “Since the great battle, I have not been the same, and it has nothing to do with the hardship and having no home...it’s something deeper....” “Deeper in what way? Spiritual? Or love?” “Love....its love and its torturous ways to manipulate my mind” Eytukan sighed, Tsu’tey clearly wasn’t over Neytiri. This was going to be difficult. “Neytiri is gone Tsu’tey, she has gone with Eywa. You need to move on. I have, and I’m her father. I’m sure she would want you to live your own life” Tsu’tey looked sharply up at him, and muttered the words “It’s not Neytiri” “Well then, who is it?” “Jake” -- Jake couldn’t keep his head clear enough to hunt, so he sent the hunters in the correct direction, and returned to the village. Slumping down behind Vitraya Ramunong, he closed his eyes, and before he knew it, he was asleep. He knew what dreams awaited him; he had been having them for what seemed like forever after the battle. Slowly drifting into a purple haze in his dreams, he saw flickering pictures, pictures of the past, flashing as quickly as the eye blinks. On every purple cloud, he saw another vision of Tsu’tey! “This isn’t right! Why the hell is this happening to me!?!” Jake screamed in his mind. Moving through the fog, he began to see two people, hugging each other close, Jake couldn’t quite make out their faces, but he spotted a scar on the right shoulder, and looked down at his own....it was the same scar. Suddenly, the fog blurred all around him, and he was left in absolute solitude in a limbo. Jake struggled in his dreams, and as soon as the fog had come, it had dissipated, and a crystal clear voice he knew all too well glided into his dreams.... ”Jake, you are not alone, there are other people who love you, other people who think about you” “Neytiri! Neytiri? Where are you?!” “I’m with you, like always, but Jake, I’m not your only hope for a happy life. Think about others” “I don’t want others, I want you!” “Goodbye Jake” The last word echoed in his mind and he screamed, his name spinning in his head; he awoke to Tsu’tey shaking him awake, shouting his name. Lines of concern marked Tsu’s face as he stared at Jake. The entire clan was standing around him, looking at him. Jake tried to shake Tsu’tey off, but he held him down and said, “Jake, I’ve been meaning to tell you something, something I’ve held inside for far too long” “What?!” Jake snapped. Tsu’tey knelt down, and said three words: “I Love You” (TBC) Wooo, I love writing these. <3 |
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Awesome Story Txon, keep it up ~Skxawng (Ps: Neytiri Fanboys = Suck it! ^_^) |
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WOW. I'm quite upset that Neytiri is gone, but I think that's what drives the story. Something inside me still craves the next chapter. Not sure what to think about Tsu'tey and Jake though.
Your imagery is as crystal clear as the movie. I can easily depict all the action, down to the color. ...And I'm kind of curious why Mo'at hasn't "made an appearance"? I figured she would be the first to know what is going on, especially with Jake. Just a question. I'll try not to let it get to me, but I can't wait to read more. |
I read chapter one so far and it seems like it will be good! i guess Ts'utey and Eytukan (spelling?) survived lol cause in the movie they died... so i guess u made it different :P lol
haha and the Jake and Ts'u thing is interesting :P sorry i couldnt read more.. i cant focus on alot of writing at once.. its kinda hard on a computer screen :P its different when it comes to an actual book lol |
I have to say, it's very well written, the imagrey is fantasic and the language is too. That surely is an "interesting" pairing, but it's nothing I can't handle, personally...
Keep up the good work, will be checking up on this one. :) |
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I have mixed feeling about Jake & Tsu'tey ... but you're a very good writer! :) |
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Technically, your sentence structure is spot on; the way you've broken up your writing makes it very easy to clarify what's happened. On an artistic bent, I love how descriptive your prose is. (Your writing hearkens me back to all those "creative writing" assignments back in high school!) Your words easily trigger the movie projector in my head and just like the two posts above, I can so clearly "see" what's going on. By the way, just as "Kxani Yawne" romantically brought together two female Na'vi, I see nothing wrong with exploring the romantic relationship between two male Na'vi. Aaaaand I'll start the chant: Moar... :) |
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And as for the dreaded chant: MOAR Chapter 3 is planned, expect it tomorrow at some point. I think you guys can hold on 1 day :) :party: |
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