Why I fight

[Ashen Key]

Originally Posted by Rainbowhawk1993

Thank you for the critque, I will get to the spell checking soon. to answer your question, Neytiri was asking him if he still wanted to have her as a mate because she still loved him for who he was. I just changed it just now so it will make sense. Personaly, I chose this path because I didn't want it to end with lemon juice. Further more, I think that the other one had the blame primaraly on jake and It made me feel that it was jakes problem the whole time. I wrote this to have a burdin on both of the characters and those burdens would get them back together.

I. Yeah, if you are using Word, I recommend keeping the spell-check on; if you are using FF, it should have a built-in dictionary - not sure about other types of browser, but I really do recommend it. I'm dyslexic myself, and spell-checker (although it can make mistakes) is just a wonderful thing.

And yep, I get that that was what she was asking, but the sentence structure made little sense and it just rang awkwardly to my mind's ear.

And that is perfectly fair! As I said, we all have different views of how this conversation would have gone down. Personally, I'm more with Sothis' take - I think under the circumstances, Neytiri was perfectly entitled to be exceedingly upset at him - but overall, she certainly wasn't blameLESS, either (husband or no husband, Jake messed up - but then again, did he KNOW he was getting married to her, and so on). But this doesn't mean your own take isn't perfectly valid, and I can certainly see you were aiming for them both being in the wrong. It's not where I'd put it, but it works well enough