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05-26-2010, 11:16 PM
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"Mo’at’s eyes continued to burn with a bright fury that went un-subdued by Eytukan’s taunts..."
"The clan picked up on Mo’at’s fury, and continued to move backwards, slowly but surely as Mo’at prowled towards them..." "...even Grace stopped with her churlish expressions and snapped her attention to Jake’s face." Oh my heavens, Txon: your writing is CAPTIVATING, both in the vocabulary you used and how you've fit those words into such descriptive prose. I am now suspicious that you're only 15... And as always, the dialogue is COMPLETELY believable, from the somewhat stilted and formal English spoken by Mo'at to the tone of Grace's words. The "Word Nerd" in me salutes the wordsmith in you... ...and demands "MOAR"!!! (Edit: I just read Txon's message saying a new installment is due each Wednesday. Waaaah! You mean I have to wait a whole week? *starts to tremble from withdrawal*)
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  Much love and gratitude to TxonTirea for my sig--squish you! Last edited by Na'vi taw'ite; 05-26-2010 at 11:18 PM. Reason: added to message 
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